Golden Star - UPDATE w/ Chapter 11: The Ride Home
This is my first post so please be kind :-) Give me feedback [ Mike and Stars' Agreement ] Chapter 1 Mike was just walking out of class, when he seen his report card, his overall grade was C-. (Mike...
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[Bathroom Frenzy] (If I made any spelling or grammer mistakes please tell me. Also give me ideas, and feedback ) When they got to school, they walked around campus for a while. Then Jessica got a...
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I'm working on the next chapter later :)
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I have the next chapter done, I'm just revising and editing. Oh and this next chapter will be longer than the others :) trust me. I'm thinking about posting it tonight or tomarrow.
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[Jessica And Star's Arrangement] Sorry it's been so long, I've been preoccupied. So there Mike was with both mistresses in the bathroom with him. Jessica came out of the stall, looking very angry,...
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I love the garbage can thing. Cool story so far!
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Good chapter. Can't wait to see what "The Ride Home" is like.
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[The Ride Home] Please give me feedback and if I made a mistake tell me. I get preoccupied with work and my social life, so might not always be on time. I am also thinking about doing another story...
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i love how he's being made to eat all this garbage. it's really humiliating! keep it up!
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Good update. Curious to see what happens at Jessica's party. Since you wanted us to let you know about mistakes, I'll point out a couple... The first sentence, "part" should be "party". Near the end,...
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Thanks for telling me I'll change them :)
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The next chapter will be extra long, I'll probally have it posted by tomarrow :)
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[Fun With Mike] Please give feedback :) Oh and tell me if there's mistakes, I downloaded a Word Processor but it's really glitchy. ~When Mike and Jessica got inside, Jessica told Mike to hang her...
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Great update. I liked Jessica making him find golf balls in the basket with dirty clothes, shoes and mouse traps. I sent you a PM regarding any mistakes I found.
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JayTee69 wrote:Great update. I liked Jessica making him find golf balls in the basket with dirty clothes, shoes and mouse traps. I sent you a PM regarding any mistakes I found.Thanks, I was trying to...
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[Night Time] As usual I would like feedback :) Thank you Jessica led Mike upstairs towards her bedroom, which was across the hall from the bathroom, when she got an idea. She then redirected Mike,...
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Bobbing for an apple in the toilet...nice! I wonder what he'll have to do next? :-)
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JayTee69 wrote:Bobbing for an apple in the toilet...nice! I wonder what he'll have to do next? :-)Thanks, I actually have a few more really cool ideas I wanna try. :) The only problem is I'm trying to...
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